Katzbalger Ritter (Attempt 2)

A collection of the previously approved/denied character's applications complete with feedback posts for future reference.
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Approval Poll - Katzbalger Ritter

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2
67%
Deny
0
No votes
Withheld
1
33%
 
Total votes: 3
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Katzbalger Ritter
Posts: 2
Joined: Mon May 29, 2023 4:59 pm
Age: 18
Gender Identity: Female
Race: Faunus; Cat Ears
Aura Color: Snow white
Occupation:
Semblance Name: Nebulös
Weapon Name: Zahn and Nagel

1. Are you 18 or older? We want to know if anyone is under 18 years of age. Being under 18 will not bar you from participating in our community. Rather, this will allow us to gauge who is acting inappropriately toward minors.

2. Do you have past experience with collaborative writing or roleplay, and if so, roughly how much? You can be brief. This is intended to help us provide useful feedback in your approval.

3. You may include an optional (SHORT!) Roleplay sample for people to read that gives a feel for your character in writing.
1. 26

2. Yes. (Off and on for over a decade)

3.
"Officer Ritter, surely you do not intend to reason with this beast? Leave it in the cold to join its-" The voice was cut off by the click of a sword returning to its scabbard and locking. The graying-haired male's silence seemed to be its own answer to the younger male, who furrowed his brow but backed off, grumbling. The Specialist walked up to the young girl holding a spear clearly not sized for her. She had just slain the downed Grimm that his team had been dispatched to kill. A young female Faunus had snuck in past a group of Military's awareness and slain their target right from under their noses, yet she clearly only had eyes for that creature instead of making an attack on the humans. That in itself was quite interesting to the leader of the unit. Quite interesting indeed.

"We will escort this girl out of the cold, as she is the one responsible for the dissipation of the target. If any others choose to speak out, they will need to file a report on why they were forced to walk the return trip. Do I make myself clear?" The group simply nodded in unison, before the Specialist returned his gaze to the Faunus. "Do you have a home to return to, small huntress? Would you be opposed to joining in our own hunt?" The girl looked surprised but shook her head and then nodded, in response to the questions.
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Professor Wednesday Haptasnytrir
Posts: 79
Joined: Fri Jul 23, 2021 11:04 pm
Age: 39
Gender Identity: Female*
Race: Human
Aura Color: Grey
Occupation: Professor, Huntress
Semblance Name: Hliðskjálf
Weapon Name: Gungnir and Valföðr

I'd ask for a bit more detail on how Katzbalger is extroverted given the very passive aspects of her personality. It isn't an outright contradictory element, but one I think could use some elaboration. She doesn't share her own thoughts and keeps to listening; how would she be extroverted, then? Does she keep the conversation going, baiting information out of people? She can be the talker in that way, leaving threads for people to pick up on that don't necessarily add to the dialogue, but present a lot of ways people can approach. She brings out others opinions rather than providing her own is what I get out of this, but do correct me if I'm wrong. Her Social Strength of being able to speak up where others do not is also something to consider.

There's something to be said about Katzbalger remaining undetected during a military operation, especially with a Specialist among them. The Backstory is sparse, but serviceable.

Minor Points: What kind of firearm is Maut supposed to be? There is mention of a pistol in her fighting style, so I assume it's that, but clarification would be appreciated. Does she keep a firearm on her despite her dislike of them because of her own "do anything necessary" attitude? I wonder if that's her "true" mentality and the honorable way of fighting is what Stahl expected and taught her how to fight?

I can approve of Katzbalger Ritter as is, though I prefer if the above points are addressed before I do so.
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Al Ciendra
Posts: 430
Joined: Tue Feb 02, 2021 5:13 am
Age: 18
Gender Identity: Female
Race: Faunus (Wolf-Ears and Fangs)
Aura Color: Orange
Occupation: Beacon Student
Semblance Name: Volcanic Heart
Weapon Name: Arcum and Gladio

Well there sadly isn't a lot to be said about Katz, I like the shift she has in her fighting style depending on who she's facing, the backstory short as it is, is nice.

But besides that and with the minor issues Sheid mentioned above still not being adressed and the profile itself being somewhat bland, Katz is in my eyes serviceable, as Sheid aptly put it.

I'll approve of Katz but please do keep working on her.
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Professor W B Copperfield
Posts: 219
Joined: Fri Jan 08, 2021 9:58 am
Age: 42
Gender Identity: Male
Race: Human
Aura Color: Transparent light blue
Occupation: Professor of Dust and Semblance Usage, Beacon
Semblance Name: Forzare
Weapon Name: Foci and Rod

I like Kat! Seems like what Shied talked about got changed, and I think she's totally acceptable.
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Professor Wednesday Haptasnytrir
Posts: 79
Joined: Fri Jul 23, 2021 11:04 pm
Age: 39
Gender Identity: Female*
Race: Human
Aura Color: Grey
Occupation: Professor, Huntress
Semblance Name: Hliðskjálf
Weapon Name: Gungnir and Valföðr

At this time, Katzbalger Ritter will be approved for roleplay! Once this thread has been locked and moved to Approval Archives, please claim the character in the Colors' discord server at #Who is Who?.
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Silent and thoughtful and bold in strife
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