Colors of Remnant

Bartok Evergreen wrote: ↑

Sat Sep 09, 2023 9:54 pm

Ok! Well, creepy doll vibes aside, I like her! Leaning towards Yes as long as a few little things are tidyed up.

First off, Semblance. There should be something noted in her Semblance description of how it interacts with people who have Aura. Does it have a harder time afflicting them? An *easier* time? Does Cleare need to have more focus when trying to control someone with Aura, limiting her number of affected targets if they have Aura?
Also, this Semblance touches on one of the DONTS int he rules, however it isn't mind control but body control. As she is an antagonist I personally feel like stronger, more "wrong feeling" Semblances should have some play. However if she gets accepted, be mindful to talk to the characters you're interacting with to make sure what you're doing is ok and you come up with cool things to do narratively, not just "haha your mine now get rekt".

Secondly, Backstory. Like it. So she's not to be a student, at least not currently(maybe after she's redeemed?) An antagonist/villain type character. I would take the stuff you wrote in the Recent Events box and put it at the end of the Backstory Highlights. Recent Events are normally kept for recent happenenings in threads and whatnot.

Thirdly, while I like the idea of Villain/Antagonist characters, we don't have guidelines for them yet like we do for students. I could make a rough guideline for antagonists like I did with Professor characters, but villain/antagonists should be far more open than Professors. Others might have their own ideas, but I think what you have here is fine, a good baseline or example if approved.

So the first two things altered a little, and I'm good to put my Yes vote on this.

Akiko Momiji wrote: ↑

Sun Sep 10, 2023 5:10 am

Had to take a few reads back and forth between sections, but I am going to leave a yes.

1. I don't know what was written before in the semblance section, but I think the changes that Bartok pointed out are solid. Anything that is core to a character like a unique passive as an example should have a list of strengths and weaknesses to it. There is going to be a good number of flaws when it comes to some semblances and how they work, but it can be improved overtime via character development or certain events. I do also feel a specific vibe especially with the usage of Cleare's semblance to create strings to control multiple people to which I like, mainly because I feel it's too simple if someone does the whole string idea but they have to manage strictly two people.

2. Backstory is also solid. I don't have any real objections if this was for a Villain/Antagonist type character, but there's no real guidelines yet for that so I can't really say anything about it.

Other than that, *gets a stamp of yes*